Easy

New creative writing photo prompt from: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields – addicted to purple

Under the Friday Fictioneers -photo prompt flash fiction (in 100 words)

(For photo credit please click Beth Carter’s photo!)

home-made_car

Easy 

Searching  the streets looking for just the right one, surveying his trophies, musing, “How easy it used to be.”  She walked the gutter, her back to him, thumb out.  He pulled alongside.  Before he could ask she slid over the car door and into the seat in a fluid movement.

Smiling, joking, laughter, he shy, she bold.   They drove on for a while, neither cared where they might end up; each knew their destination would be secluded.

Noticing his photographs she quipped, “Old girl friends?”

He replied, “You might say that.”

Smiling,  they  thought, “This’s gonna’ be easy.”

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NOTE:  This was a walk on the wild side for me.  I took one look at the photo and there I was.

Are you shocked?

I was!

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53 thoughts on “Easy

    • Lynda says:

      We were definitely working opposite ends of the same story! I wonder if the mother in Shirley’s story knew about her daughter’s secret life? 😉
      Thanks for sharing!

    • Lynda says:

      Lori, taking a closer look at the photograph began it. It was the photos on the inside of the car door that sparked the idea. I knew what I wanted to happen and wrote it all down in about 15 minutes. Then I went back and adjusted the wording. Juggling the words down to only 100 of them to tell all that I wanted to say took about an hour… Take a word(s) out here, add a word(s) there. I had a lot to convey, and the end result is very terse. I was also suffering from a dangling participle which sent Bob off the deep end! I fixed it and now he’s all better, and so is the wretched sentence! 😉

      Bad sentence: She walked the gutter, thumb out, and back to him.
      Better sentence: She walked the gutter, her back to him, thumb out.

    • Lynda says:

      Linda, apparently, the guy made it from the ground up and it runs! If you click the photograph you will be taken to the original photo and the woman who took it. She won a contest for this photo too! Fun!

    • Lynda says:

      It took me a minute to understand what you were telling me. I thought you were saying to add the letter “a” after friends. It’s past my bedtime. 😛
      Got it, fixed it, and thank you, Ted!

    • Lynda says:

      Hello, Björn! Of course you aren’t. That’s because you don’t know that most of my writing is fantasy and children’s fare! 😉 Thank you for your comments!

  1. train-whistle says:

    am thinking as lingeringvisions does, these two deserve each other. You did a nice job of pulling together a whole story in these 100 words. I see the effort you took.

    • Lynda says:

      Thank you, Penny, I am glad you liked it. I am hoping these little short stories will help me get over my fear of committing to writing longer passages.

  2. rich says:

    reminds me of a short story i wrote. so, well done.

    i’m curious about this part:
    Bad sentence: She walked the gutter, thumb out, and back to him.
    Better sentence: She walked the gutter, her back to him, thumb out.

    i would remove “her” from the better sentence to make it even better.

    • Lynda says:

      Rich, the change you suggest would make the sentence indicate that she was returning to him. Yes?

      With so few words available, I had to be terse. I wanted the reader to see what he saw when he discovered her walking in the gutter. Her back was to him and her thumb was out. Most people hitchhiking are walking backwards and looking hopeful. Not her. Her seemingly laissez-fair attitude was the attraction… “I will be picked up, or I will not… ”
      😉

  3. denmother says:

    Lynda, I loved this story. What are the chances of two people with the same evil intent meeting? I totally believed it though. They are both trolling the roadways to the same end and eventually I suppose each will die at the hands of a driver/passenger. I wonder who wins this battle?

    • Lynda says:

      They are both in for a rude surprise… Having been drawn to each other like magnets, I wonder, how will their evening end? I am not certain. After this I just can’t let my mind wander any further!

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