Battle Ready (Completely rewritten!)

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Yes, it is.

Thank you, Rochelle, for all your hard work in obtaining the prompts each week.

FRIDAY FICTIONEERS BANNERPosted for June 26, 2015

KENT

PHOTO PROMPT – © Kent Bonham

In my rush to publish this morning I think I wrote my first DUD.  So, I went back to the computer and completely re-wrote my entry.  I feel better about it now.  🙂

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Battle Ready

The war between the tribes had been going on for centuries. Mirabella, now experienced enough to go to war, only needed her battle kit. She’d saved for some time to purchase the No.22 hanging there on the wall. It was more than she needed, yet contained all the essentials.

It was well known that this shopkeeper would sell to anyone. However, the garlic hung out front clearly indicated his preference. Holding her breath she ducked into the shop.

Paying him for her purchase, she grinned when she handed back the lantern and nasty dehydrated food.

She wouldn’t be needing them.

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100 words exactly.

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37 thoughts on “Battle Ready (Completely rewritten!)

  1. Sandra says:

    I didn’t get it, Dee. I shall have a think about it over breakfast (probably too early for my brain anyway) and come back in a while to read the other comments. Hope all is well with you.

    • Lynda says:

      Dear Rochelle,

      It was, as were the grin when she handed back the lantern and freeze dried food she wouldn’t need. This story is fast becoming the stale joke that you have to explain in order to get the listener to “get it”. 😉 I realized it was bad when 11 people came by to visit, and of those 4 clicked the “like” button and left, and the rest just left… That was why I rewrote it, but for most of my readers it hasn’t helped much.

      And that is OK, even Stephen King has written some clinkers so I guess I learn and then try harder next time. 😀

      Shalom,
      Lynda

    • Lynda says:

      Francesca, I think she was doing well to have been able to purchase them at all. But I’m certain her toothy grin and his involuntary flinch were ample compensation. Don’t you agree? 😀

    • Lynda says:

      Thank you, Gahlearner. I think I might like to expand this to a short story, because the whole time I was writing it I wanted to say so much more than 100 words would allow.

      I may just do it. 🙂

  2. Margaret says:

    I thought you were setting up the shopkeeper as a dealer or supplier for criminal gangs, or others who operate under the radar. The twist when you reveal who she really is works well.

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