My entry for Friday Fictioneers, the week of 31-may-2013
THE CHALLENGE:
Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end. (No one will be ostracized for going over or under the word count.)
THE KEY:
Make every word count.
TITLE: The Dress
Dina liked the dress the moment she saw it. The color, the miles of tulle in the skirt, in a word, perfect!
Pushing the dress deep into the tub, she held it under the water until all the air was released, and it had quit bubbling. Then she left it to soak for a bit.
Returning later, she removed it from the tub, drained out the water, and refilled it with fresh for a rinse. Gently she removed the dress, placed it onto a hangar and hung it outside to dry.
Now, what to do with the body? she thought.
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Thank you Rochelle for another great prompt!
I love this! 4what to do with the body’, that is the question…
Thank you, Hannah!
Oh I was hoping there would be a body.
hmmm motive: one red dress
Thank you, Moondustwriter!
Nice ending. Hmm, yes, bodies are harder to get rid of than stains. By the way, have you seen the Breaking Bad episode where they tried to get rid of a boy in a bathtub with acid? Not a good idea…:)
Thank you, David! “Breaking Bad?? I suspect I would need cable for that one. 😉
I don’t watch it myself, but my wife watches episodes online. She showed me that scene though.
The acid dissolved the body, then ate through the bathtub and through the floor. Quite a mess…
GACK! I should think so!
Ha ha – jolly good 😉
Surprised you then, Annie? Thank you!
Excellent! I didn’t expect it at all.
Good then! Thanks, Honie!
Every word surely counts here in the gruesome tale! Bravo.
Thank you, Viv!
Gruesome… it is worrisome. Where does it all come from? Why do the photographs from FFs bring it out in me?
Hm. I suspect it was all those late night reads with Ray Bradbury, Alfred Hitchcock, and Stephen King over the years! 😉
Great ending, Lynda.
Thank you, Victoria!
Hey… do you prefer Vicki to Victoria? (just noticed it recently)
Naughty naughty! Charmingly recounted!
Yes, tis true! Thank you, Yerpirate!
ouuuuuu, like the little twist at the end.
Thank you, Buffalostarmedicine! 😀
Hello Lynda, it’s not an easy challenge but you did very well! thanks for sharing, I loved it!
Chantal, thank you, I’m glad you liked it. 🙂
What I liked is that at first read, I thought she was trying to figure out how to get her body in shape and the the second time I realized she needed to get rid of the body that had been inside the dress. 🙂 Should have remembered this was FF and expected the dead body.
janet
I am often surprised by how I react to FF photos. Thank you, Sustainabilitea!
Envy — there’s a reason it’s a deadly sin, darling. Brilliant.
Thank you, Helena!
Oh my goodness, Lynda! You totally rock!! I had to read it TWICE because it’s just so unlike you to, well… concoct such a scenario! Bravo to you! I love it!
Ha, I was just mentioning to another commenter that these Friday Fictioneer photo prompts seem to bring out the twisted in me…
Thanks, Lori!
Hey! You’re the first one with a dead body! Congratulations (there ought to be an award). This was very clever.
Am I? How unusual! Yes, and if someone makes it then I will accept! Thank you, H. Ken Abell!
Loved it. That was a twist in my taste… just wondering. I thought the dress was white to start with.
No, Björn, the dress was rose, which was Dina’s favorite color, and of course why she had to have it!
Glad you like it!
Dear Lynda,
I laughed out loud at the end. I didn’t see that coming. Good job!
Shalom,
Rochelle
So did my husband! This surprised me, because I have to twist his arm to get him to read and respond to my efforts. 😉
Thank you, Rochelle!
OMG..and here I thought she was dying it red.
Surprise! 😉
Thank you, Lingeringvisions.
Loved it!!!!!
Thank you, Jan!
Loved this one. I was trying to figure out what she was doing with the dress and then the last line told all.
😉
Thank you, Mystikel!
good twist…. fun read. Hope she doesn’t wash and rinse and then hang the body outside to dry too. Randy
That would definitely be a faux pas!
Thank you, Randy!
Oh, how awful! Completely unexpected. Good writing!
I mean, of course, that the ending was unexpected, not that good writing was unexpected! 🙂
Not to worry, I understood, Waitingforaname. Thank you! 😀
Superb Lynda!
Thank you, Linda!
Great “Tales from the Crypt” job. Very much pulled the wool over my eyes!
HA! Good then, Perry!
What a twist to your “nice little tale”. great job.
Thank you, Lily. Funny thing is, that this was starting out to be a Molly Ringwold Pretty in Pink tale and I hated it. Too familiar, I told myself. So I changed it up. 😉
If you really like a dress – just go for it. Great twist on this, wasn’t expecting it at all.
Good then, I wanted to
shocksurprise the reader. 😉Thank you, Sandra!
I just love it.
Thank you Connie. 😀
I wondered what she was having to rinse out. The bubbles coming up made me think it was going to be revealed a person was still in the dress.
Thank you, Joe…
She was!
Hee hee I was seeing it after all, neato!
Yup.
I just loooooove surprises! And that ending was certainly a nice one! Nice intro for me to your work. I look forward to reading more now. Well done Lynda!
Welcome, John, and thank you!
Ohhhh! Masterfully twisted – a great flash – well written.
Thank you, Neenslewy! 😀
Nice one!
The last line give it a great twist – well done
Dee
Thank you, Dee, it was a fun one to write!